cassie ([info]fish_for_stars) wrote,
@ 2009-04-10 03:30:00
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Current mood:&; haha
Current music:dia // how did i get here
Entry tags:original, poetry

(throwback, throwback to bad poetry. i was a pretty insecure kid at 13, too, apparently.)

2005.

truth.

a few words
t u m b l i n g
out of someone's mouth
carelessly said
not aimed to wound
just
the blunt
Truth.
i never imagined it could feel
the raw unveiling, painfully real
and it unravels my carefully spun acceptance
of my flaws.
it unravels that tentative thread, that fragile strand
and crumbles
my walls.

love, cassie.


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[info]nuvolaluz
2009-04-10 04:33 pm UTC (link)
more ee cummings Fish! I have to say that I love how well you broke up the lines. Sometimes my poems look/read awkward for this reason. And the 9th and 10th lines rhyme effortlessly without regard to the rest of the poem. I really like that, because when I start to use rhyming in poems, I think it should be for the whole poem, and I've not really read a lot of poems that could pull that off in the middle and just go on so smoothly.

(also, a different icon? *blink* nice)

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[info]fish_for_stars
2009-04-10 05:53 pm UTC (link)
hey darling you flatter me. :] but thanks. i have a strange relationship with rhyming. a couplet usually sneaks in. D: oh, hey you, saw your screenplay. will comment later. :D

(yes? :])

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[info]hanakage
2009-04-10 06:33 pm UTC (link)
I wish I could write poetry a fraction as lovely as this when I was thirteen! ;)

♥

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